Argyle Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 A limerick you write, I may fail Amongst you wordsmiths, I flail The river is high The carp they will fly In a few weeks I launch Argyle and Sail Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bob White Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 the skipper was full of dismay his boat was not yet under weigh the mast it was lifted his crew surely gifted but from water he was way faraway Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gold Winger Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 I know that you're a Sea Scout guy but in the Navy it's "underway." "Under weigh" is a common mistake that many (including CS Forester) have made over the centuries because one "weighs anchor" so they think that we should get "under weigh" but but the origins of the words are different. Weighing anchor has to do with raising the anchor, just as one used to raise something up to get it's weight (to weigh). However, "underway" is a corruption of the Dutch "onderweg" meaning "on the way." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zahnada Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 There once was a scouter Gold Winger, Who outstretched his nagging finger. But I'm sorry, my mate, Words don't carry weight, Unless written as a limerical zinger. See, doesn't this make arguing fun? Shouldn't this be how all forums are run? Once posters grow weary, Of this lyrical fury, They will ditch the 'net for some sun. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bob White Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 The term I believe is called "poetic license". Under weigh is indeed an oft used nautical term of old. Yes, it is a corruption of underway but it has been used before in nautical writing as you have already verified for us. Since the limerick was of a nautical nature I took license to use this old nautitical version of the phrase. I am confident that its use was not in violation of any known poetic rule or policy, while staying within the fixed rules of limerick structure. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gold Winger Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 Nice little dance Bob, doesn't change the fact that the usage is and was incorrect. You could have used the correct term without impacting your little poem in the least but you probably didn't have a clue. Here's two bucks. Go buy a clue along with a sense of humor. There was a Scouter named White Of the rules he knew he was right Of life he knew nil Or less even still Thank God I don't suffer his plight Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Argyle Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 (This message has been edited by Argyle) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bob White Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 I know that my use of of the word weigh was not done to personally insult or libel anyone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
emb021 Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 I'm still waiting for haiku. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gold Winger Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 However, it offended me and by today's PC standards, an unintentional offense is far worse than an intentional one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OldGreyBear Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 Haikus are hunted Rebuffs to be given fast Or Perhaps half Speed Now Wanted Haiku Do not have to make much sense Same as the poster Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bob White Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 old man lost in fog rides on a cycle of gold insults fall like rain Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gold Winger Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 I'm sure that's supposed to be a jibe at me but you've got your "facts" wrong. I'm not old, never been lost in fog, my cycle isn't gold, and they aren't insults if they're true. I know that you'll argue poetic license but that's just a synonym for "just plain wrong but unwilling to admit it." Come on Bob, I'm sure that you can do better than that. You haven't even mentioned training yet. Under poetic license, the above is haiku. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bob White Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 Actually hiaku, like limerick, has a set structure, three lines, 5 beats, 7 beats, 5 beats. Traditional haiku includes a reference to the seasons or nature. What you posted is not haiku, nor does it meet any structure of poetry. For effective poetry you need to understand structure. Like Scouting there are some rules you need to know if you are to be successful at your attempt. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gold Winger Posted April 23, 2008 Share Posted April 23, 2008 Nah Bob, you missed the point as usual. Under poetic license, anything can be whatever I want it to be. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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